(DOCSP-33242) concision

Author: carriecwk

source/release-notes/changelogs/ops-manager/changelog-onprem-v6.0.rst

@@ -351,15 +351,11 @@
 
 .. note::
 
-   ``network.target`` in a ``systemd`` unit file indicates that the network management stack 
-   has been started. Ordering after ``network.target`` has little meaning 
-   during start-up, because ``after=network.target`` doesn't define whether any network interfaces have 
-   already been configured when ``network.target`` is reached. Therefore, when waiting on ``network.target``, 
-   it is possible that the :manual:`mongod </reference/program/mongod/#mongodb-binary-bin.mongod>` fails to start 
-   after a system reboot. Most Linux host-oriented distributions with ``systemd`` support ``network-online.target`` 
-   which indicates that your network connectivity has been established. Its primary purpose is to actively delay the 
-   activation of services until the network is up. To improve user experience, |onprem| server 6.0.13 updates the |onprem| 
-   systemd unit file from ``after=network.target`` to ``after=network-online.target``.
+   To improve user experience, |onprem| server 6.0.13 updates the |onprem| systemd unit file from 
+   ``after=network.target`` to ``after=network-online.target``. This prevents reboot failures caused 
+   by attempting to start :manual:`mongod </reference/program/mongod/#mongodb-binary-bin.mongod>` after 
+   the network management stack has started, but before verifying that the network connectivity has 
+   been established.
 
 - Updates the {+mdbagent+} to :ref:`12.0.21.7698 
   <mongodb-12.0.21.7698>`.